Write a translation commentary around a choice you can explain
Explain a translation choice through its source context, alternatives, purpose and limits, with an original fictional commentary example.
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Identify a consequential choice in your translation, show the alternatives you considered and explain why the chosen wording fits the source passage and the translation’s purpose. A commentary should make your reasoning inspectable. Saying that a phrase was difficult, or that the final version sounds better, leaves the reader unable to assess the decision.
Follow your actual assignment’s requirements for the text, commentary, references and permitted assistance. This guide concerns explaining decisions in work you have done. It does not supply a translation to submit, certify linguistic accuracy or establish a universal translation method.
Start with a located decision rather than the whole process
Keep the source passage, the working translation and the commentary distinguishable. Record where the relevant word, phrase or structure occurs and which version of the translation you are discussing. A commentary about an earlier draft can become misleading if the final text now uses different wording.
A 2025 translation exercise and commentary task from Gonville & Caius College, Cambridge, read on 4 November 2026, asks learners to identify particular translation challenges and explain how they resolved them. It describes the commentary as critical reflection on the translator’s own decisions. Its specified passage choices, lengths, number of examples and tool restrictions belong to that exercise; use the requirements that govern your own work.
Choose an example because something worth explaining changes between the alternatives. The issue might concern register, sentence structure, a repeated expression or how much ambiguity to retain. Name the issue precisely enough that the reader can return to the passage and understand why you selected it.
Reconstruct the choice from your actual working record
Before writing polished prose, note the source feature, relevant context, alternatives and reason for the decision. Do not invent a tidy sequence of rejected versions if you did not consider them. A later comparison can still be useful, but identify it as a comparison made during reflection rather than a recovered account of your original process.
Keep different kinds of support separate. A dictionary entry may inform a possible sense; the surrounding passage may help distinguish senses; the brief may establish the intended reader. None of these automatically proves that every choice in the finished translation is appropriate.
Use technical terms when they make the explanation more exact and you can apply them accurately. A label alone is not a reason. Explain what the named feature changes in this passage and why that matters for the task.
Work through an original fictional decision record
Everything in this exercise is invented teaching material. There is no original-language passage, actual museum, commissioned translation or tested reader response behind it. The supplied meaning and two English options let us examine the structure of an explanation; they cannot establish cross-language accuracy.
Imagine a fictional translation brief for a short visitor guide. It calls for direct language addressing visitors. The supplied source-analysis record says that a closing sentence permits visitors to leave a note; it neither requires a note nor promises a reply. The working record contains these English options:
| Part of the fictional record | What the commentary can examine |
|---|---|
| Option A: “Visitors may leave a note.” | Permission is expressed through a third-person sentence |
| Option B: “You can leave a note.” | The reader is addressed directly, matching the supplied brief’s requested approach |
| Final choice: Option B | The explanation should connect the change in address to the brief while retaining permission |
| No information about replies | Neither the translation nor commentary should add a promise that someone will respond |
The useful comparison is between two formulations in relation to the supplied task. It is not a demonstration that one modal verb is always better, that every visitor guide should use direct address or that actual readers will respond more positively.
A weak commentary says:
I used a translation strategy because the second sentence is more natural and will make visitors feel welcome.
It names no specific change, gives no basis for naturalness and predicts a reader response that has not been tested. A bounded explanation for this fictional exercise could read:
In the closing invitation, I chose “You can leave a note” rather than “Visitors may leave a note.” The second-person address follows the brief’s request to address visitors directly. Both options were considered against the supplied interpretation of the source as granting permission, rather than requiring an action. I retained the option to leave a note without adding a promise of a reply, which the record does not establish. This explains the choice in relation to the fictional brief; it does not demonstrate how real visitors would interpret the sentence.
In real work, replace the supplied interpretation with a located source passage and an analysis you can support. If the meaning itself remains uncertain, a fluent account of the target wording does not resolve that uncertainty. Check it through the language and subject resources appropriate to your task.
Explain the trade-off, not only the advantage
Ask what the selected wording preserves and what it changes. A shorter sentence might alter emphasis; a more explicit expression might reduce ambiguity that the source retains. Describe the actual relationship rather than presenting your choice as a gain with no possible cost.
Keep your conclusion within the comparison you made. Explaining one decision does not establish the quality of the entire translation. Equally, acknowledging a limitation does not make the explanation useless: it shows the reader where your justification is strongest and what remains open.
If you draw on a published translation, dictionary or scholarly account, identify the resource actually used and follow the required citation convention. Do not claim support from a text you have only seen mentioned elsewhere. Credit does not replace explaining how the resource bears on this particular choice.
Reconcile the commentary with the final translation
Read each example beside its source location and final wording. Check that the commentary describes the version you will submit, that any quoted wording is exact and that the account of your process is honest. Remove predictions about reader effects that you have not established.
The APA translation guide addresses attribution when using a translated passage in academic writing. A translation commentary has the separate task of explaining your decisions. The historical-source commentary guide concerns interpreting documentary evidence. Keep the purpose of your own commentary clear before borrowing another genre’s structure.
